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Revise the sample sentences below, first replacing the passive verb (any form of “to be” – is, was, were, are, etc.) with a stronger, more specific verb. Then, write a more intensive revision, restructuring or rewriting other aspects of the sentence, doing some light guesswork about context and intent. Usually, this type of revision leads to a bolder, clearer, and more precise claim.
Write a long paragraph (around 150 words for each sample) in a narrative style that includes unexpected details, imaginative flourishes, and gives the reader a sense of an individual perspective (the perspective could belong to the ‘real’ you, some exaggerated/theatrical version of you, or it could be a wholly invented persona).